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Jordan Oberrath

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Hello to all,

I used to be on this board a lot years ago but have been busier in life and have not been on here very recently. However, I wrote this song about Brian's influence in my life about 18 months ago and posted it here to get some opinions but no one gave them and I assumed it was because it was not very good and you were all being polite. Well, I have spent a good bit of time learning how to write and produce better songs. I would greatly appreciate it if any Brian fans gave me their honest opinions on this revamped version of the song. 

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xP5mHIYz5v8JpJ-2t1eDDOEeL4y_VT7g/view?usp=sharing

Thank you,

Jordan Oberrath
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Lee Marshall

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I've been thinking about this for 24 hours Jordan.  'Dear Brian' still needs work.  You're not finished yet.  As you likely know...Brian usually worked with a collaborator.  From Gary and Roger...from Tony and Van Dyke...From one member of his family to another...Brian partnered up with other talented people.  He still does.

You might want to consider that as a logical next step.  THAT move might land you at, or closer to, the finish line.
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Jordan Oberrath

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Thank you. I appreciate the feedback. I do write songs with my wife. I have also tried a number of other people but nothing that stuck or worked out. I have recently joined a praise and worship team full of talented people however, and I believe that may lead to something.
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bonnie bella

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I love your lyrics.
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Jordan Oberrath

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Thank you Bonnie. They are heartfelt and 100% true. I found Pet Sounds when my first marriage was ending and my now wife and I grew close because of a shared love of Brian and the boys 2 years later. Brian's music and story helped me see positivity when my life was in a dark place.
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I think that's wonderful.
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